woah...
You have alot that needs work.
But before I begin i would like to say UK stand the fuck up.
I love british hip hop artist.
Ok on to the review, you flow needs alot of work. You have way too much ups and downs, you best part was "and as a matter of fact do you know the fact that
a third building was brought down and exposed on the bbc" I wouldnt be able to tell what you were saying if it wasnt for the lyrics. And you voice was on point until you said "physically" that threw it all off and it went downhill from there.
Your an excellent writer dont get me wrong. Your delivery is just not up to par. But we all have to start somewhere right.?
I also reccomend getting a new mic, one with more clarity.
Keep at it. You have room for improvement.
Check some of my work.
-Monk Da Villain
-Illuminati stand up.