i agree with the white kids
points off just for the yelling..but maybe its because im all mellowed out atm aha.
i understand that you yelled though just for the fact that it was an agressive track. the flow was kinda up and down imo.
my favorite 4 bar was
"Its the death of gloine/ so hear's your sarcophagus
Bar's Rip your esophagus/ while your spittin monotonous
keep schemin and plottin shit/man this apocalypse
Straight Spittin it ominous/while you spit it retarded kid"
of course you already know i like the beat.
8/10
4/5